3rd response

Jaehak
11-1
04-10-08

Messenger

Response #3, pp.108- 169
Response type#3: Creative

“Messenger” by Lois Lowry’s ending took a place in the forest with a start. Then, the purpose of Matty and Kisa being in forest was going through it in order to reach the village where Matty lived and Kisa’s father, blind man, waiting for. However, as they went through the forest, it obviously changed to harm and vicious from normal. The streams prevented them to walk through the forest and the prickles cut their fresh and clothes. But, Kisa and matty did not have time to take a rest and cure their wound because the village would be closed by two days in order to not to communicate with other societies. As the time passed, their tiredness expanded to their whole body, their wound became deeper, and Kisa almost gave up going through the forest. Matty charged her so that he was not able to go alone. At that time, as the leader looked at them from the village, he realized that Matty and kisa needed a help so that even though it was dangerous for the leader, he get out of the village to help Matty and Kisa. Finally, by leader’s help, all of them were able to reach the village on time. Because of that, blind man achieved his goal which to meet his daughter, and Matty became a real citizen in village with a true name instead of the name Matty.

As you noticed above Messenger’s ending, the ending was so simple that nobody was interested in that book’s story. So, fixing the ending was going to create better novle for everyone as I thought. “Messenger” by Lois Lowry’s ending took a place in the forest with a start. Then, Matty and Kisa were ready to go through the forest before the village was closed in order not to communicate with any other societies. As they closed to the village more and more, the forest changed to harm and fear with the stream prevented them, prickles cut their fresh and clothes and the sun was gone. That was why both of them lost their strong sprite, the tiredness expanded to their whole body, and Kisa gave up going through the village. At the time, Matty asked Kisa to go before the village was closed, but Kisa just got her out by tiredness. Because of that, they got a conflict, Matty just let her sit there, and he went through the village alone by sudden temper. When Matty arrived to the village on time alone, the blind man realized that Matty was not with his daughter so that sudden temper of blind man killed matty and he also did suicide by himself. Also, kisa was dead in the forest. After that, Matty, Kisa, and blind man’s ghosts walked around the village, and more and more people left the village by that.

Mrs. Lois Lowry
Hello, Mrs. Lois Lowry, I am a reader of book which is called Messenger by you. Usually, I do not criticize any of the book’s content. However, in this time, I want to tell you something that will affect you to write better novel next time. As reading through this book, I was able to predict that what the situations will be next page or chapter by some key words all the time. To make reader to be interested in the reading, you should write a story with a reversion. Your story is nothing different with an elementary student’s imaginary. How could you write the novel like that simplest way? Were you not feeling guilty to people who buy your book? Also, modern societies’ students are not children, they are thinking like adults. So, I want you to write a novel with some reversion to make reader to be interested in reading.

Jaehak